How would you like to be remembered, Marcus.
As a caricature, a portrait, a monochrome abstract..
An outline in the sand that the wind will slowly fill with its own stories?
When it’s over, there’s just a blank canvas. People recreate memories. For themselves. For others. Forever.
I want to be remembered for the little things, the things that I have forgotten. Something I screamed to the storm when lightning streaked all the way down to the sea, cutting open the sky. Something I wrote when the new mango leaves, brown and shiny, began to curl around the melting sun. Something I whispered when the wave waited a moment longer before it…why are you smiling?
How many people know, how many can read your mind?
That depends Marcus. How well can you paint?
is it the pink shimmer of dawn
or just the tearful moon
kissing the roses goodbye
An outline in the sand that the wind will slowly fill with its own stories? Love that image.
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Thank you.
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“People recreate memories.” very true & also love narrator’s musings…the haiku is exquisite….
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Thanks so much Sumana..
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This is absolutely sublime ❤ the haiku at the end left me breathless 😀
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Thanks so much Sanaa…
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We each tell our own version of history and the part we played in it. What great thought provoking haibun.
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Thanks so much Robin.
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Your writing is so captivating and intriguing in this form – i feel like I am immersed in the world you are creating
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Thanks Jae. If you would like to, you can follow the blog via email (if you don’t have a wordpress account) Am really glad you like it.
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Such beautiful imagery! And yes we do remember the little things. A wonderful haibun!
This is Loredana from my new WP blog, here is the link for the poem shared at PU:
https://magicofwordsblog.wordpress.com/2016/08/28/stand-tall/
🙂
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Thanks Loredana.
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This is one of the most entrancing of these charming conversations, so far.
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Thank you Rosemary. I don’t link all of them to PU, there are more posts on the blog, if you wish to read 😀
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Yes, I too like the idea of being remembered for the little things….the stuff of life that makes up my (and everyone’s) humanity. I like this poem a lot. It is a favorite of yours for me & seems a bit of a different style!
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Thanks Mary. It is from my new blog in which all posts follow a conversational style of haibun. It is at phantomroad.wordpress.com
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WHew! I’m blown away, like a sand painting when the wind pauses for a second for us to commit the little things to memory before blowing it away. Grin.
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How lovely…thanks so much Susan.
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This is gorgeous writing, especially the “why are you smiling” stanza, and your haiku. Stunning imagery. Really breathtaking.
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Thanks so much Sherry. Enjoying the haibun experiments on this blog.
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Enjoyed this piece, from begining to end. …….
How many people know, how many can read your mind?
That depends Marcus. How well can you paint?………………………..really liked these two lines though.
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Thanks so much Julian 😀
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I join the rest of the comments in praising your beautiful writing. You are truly talented and wise beyond your years.
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Thank you for your very kind words Myrna.
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I really like those little things… it’s not about building a monument, but just being human… a stunning haibun that I read several times… the little details with the mango leaves… wow.
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Appreciate your comment Bjorn. Thanks so much.
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Your third line is a poem all by itself. Love it.
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Thank you Magaly.
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Beautiful imagery ! Love it.
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Thanks Ayala.
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Really like your word paintings, creating memories long after they are left,
Elizabeth
https://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2016/09/04/sometimes-cinderella/
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Thanks Elizabeth.
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Went back and started reading your July entries. Fascinating and I love the conversational style. Have been known to use it myself. But really like the fact that you are using poetic form, and the haiku endings are beautifully wrapped gifts. Clapping….
Elizabeth
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Appreciate your feedback greatly Elizabeth. Am really glad you liked the posts. I am enjoying the experiment with this new blog… thanks so much.
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A beautiful haiku that dovetails with the prose piece, wonderfully. Awesome writing!
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Thanks so much Wendy.
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Very interesting and a pleasure to read 🙂
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Thank you!
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